So here is an excerpt from Dissection. Tell me what you think.
As Astrid showed me to my room, I asked, “How
long do I have to be here, anyway?”
“Seventy-two hours minimum. The rest depends
on you. When you can be trusted not to hurt yourself, and are weaned off of
your rubber band bracelet,” she gestured to my wrist, “you should be able to
leave.”
I walked into the room and recognized a bag
sitting on the bed—my purple duffel bag from home. I tore through it just to look
at familiar things. None of my newer clothes were there, the ones I’d purchased
when I wanted to be “new Syd”, which was fine with me because I hated “new Syd”.
I began unpacking my stuff and putting
it into the closet and chest of drawers in my room. When I reached the bottom,
I found a package of gummy worms. Someone had taken the time to pick only the
red ones out and pack them up for me. Someone knew me well. I wondered who it
was.
“We have a hair dryer, flat iron, curling
iron, and shavers, but they’re locked up and may only be used under
supervision. So if you need them, let the staff know. I’m going to leave you to
get settled,” Astrid said. “I’ll come to check on you in a little while.”
A “little while” meant exactly fifteen
minutes. As a cutter, I was on what they called “Extra Vigilance” observation. This
meant that someone was checking up on me every fifteen minutes, like clockwork,
which annoyed the hell out of me. It also meant I could go outside, but only if
a staff member went with me.
I surveyed the room. My parents had brought
things to make it feel more like home. There were family photos taped to the
wall, my favorite astrology book. On the bed sat a stuffed dog I’d never seen
before. There was a card next to it. I opened it up and it said, I didn’t want you to miss Chewy too much. Love,
Bryce. Stupid, sweet brother. I wondered if he was still dating that
backstabbing bitch, Haley. I wonder if she helped him pick out the stupid dog. It
made me want to rip its head off. Instead, SNAP!
On the dresser sat a package of plastic
glow-in-the-dark stars, another card sat beside it. This one said, Wasn’t sure if you’d be able to see the sky
from your room~Zach. P.S. Hope you like the gummies. Wow. The gummies and
the stars. It made me smile, then made me feel horrible for how I’d treated him
the last few months.
Astrid popped in, scaring the hell out of me. I
nearly jumped out of my shoes. “How we doing in here?”
“Take a few minutes. I’ll come back in a
little bit and grab you for lunch.” Fab.
I lay on my bed and stared at the stark white
ceiling, regretting every decision I’d made the last few months, David, Lacy,
Zach. The E, the pot, the cutting. Being friends with Grim. I felt like I’d
been sucked into a vacuous void, floating in darkness, like Cassiopeia, not in
control of my limbs—just spinning deeper and deeper into the vortex.
love those last sentences about Cassiopeia, etc. Great stuff!
ReplyDeleteInteresting to read because In Sight of Stars is in a similar setting... :)
Thank you. Only part of my book takes place here. I think it's the most interesting section though and most fun to write. :) I did TONS of research. lol.
ReplyDeleteoooh, I love :) I like the voice of your MC, I want more!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jade!!
ReplyDeleteMegan, this is really a captivating bit! I immediately wanted to learn more about Syd and what has led her to this point. Also, I can't wait to find out what she feels she has done to all of those who care about her. Grim...quite the name and wondering about that too!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Mary. Hopefully some day this book will be on the shelves for you to read. :)
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